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You see it all around you
It permeates the air
The faces of friends show it
Yet inside you its not there.
Without it you feel empty
But can't seem to get it back
You wish, and hope, and pray, and dream
To find the happiness you lack.
©2002-2009 ~valentina
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:iconmeic2:
I really like the restrained poignancy of this piece. Your masterful understatement makes it easier to empathise. Good one!



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Try again. Fail again. Fail better.
~ Samuel Beckett ~
:iconfabulous:
I' so enchant your poetry...you said all truth...sometimes I think about this...and I look for happines, sometimes I grip it in hand, but again I miss it ...

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in cristal sphere you catch sight only our passion
:icontseia:
:D (Big Grin)

Again, I like the restrainedness, not revealing what it is that you lack until the end, but then rereading it you find it obvious. It makes you want to read it more than once, which is great :) (Smile)
:iconjustanumber:
Beautiful.

Its true, understatement makes it very real. I feel it.

Well done.
I hope you find it soon.

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Music. Beautiful, beautiful music.</i?
:iconjero1:
Nice words evoking nice tones.

Good concept, you realized with the right lenght and perfect rythm.



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"freedom is never the result of compromise" - ~nemophylia

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